Keep it up Joy Lobo!

"ತಾಣಿ ಸವಾಲ್ ಕೆಲೆಂಮಾಗ್ಚೆಂ ಕಿತ್ಯಾಕ್ ಸೊಡ್ಲೆಂಯ್?
ಅನಿ ಆರ್ಗಾಂ ದಿವ್ಚೆಂ ಕಿತ್ಯಾಕ್ ಧರ್ಲೆಂಯ್?
ಥೊಡೆ ಪಾವ್ಟಿಂ ಹೆಂ ಸವಾಲ್ ಮಕಾಯ್ ಧೊಸ್ತಾ
ಪುಣ್ ಉಪ್ಕಾರಿ ಮೊನ್ ಕಾಳಿಜ಼್ ಭರ್ತಾ

ಕಿತ್ಯಾಕ್ ಥೊಡೆ ಭುಕೆತಾನಾ, ಥೊಡೆ ತಾಂಚ್ಯಾಂತ್ಲೆ ವಾಂಟೆ ಕರ್ತಾತ್,
ಎಕ್ಲೊ ತಾನೆತಾನಾ, ಆನೆಕ್ಲೊ ಬಾಂಯ್ ಖೊಂಡ್ತಾ,
ಎಕ್ಲೊ ಹೊಗ್ಡಯ್ತಾನಾ, ಆನೆಕ್ಲೊ ಸೊದ್ತಾ

ಹೊ ಗೊಂದೊಳ್ ಸಂಸಾರ್,
ಹ್ಯಾ ಕಾಳೊಕಾಚ್ಯಾ ಸಂಸಾರಾಂತ್
ದೆವಾಚೆಂ ಮುಖಾಮೊಳ್ ಪರ್ಜಾಳ್ತಾ,
ಕಷ್ಟಾ ಮಧೆಂ, ಥೊಡೆ ಅನಿಕೀ ಜತನ್ ಘೆತಾತ್,
ಅನಿ ದೆವಾಚಿ ಆಜಾಪಾಂ ಘಡ್ತಾತ್"

Earlier there was a suggestion to Joy Lobo to pay attention to grammer and if possible request some one to check before publishing. Above I have corrected some grammer mistakes without his permission hoping he and the readers would agree with me. May be I am wrong in correcting his writing. Request readers opinion. Good one Joy. Keep it up.